My story about how I became a black elf

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Først og fremst, dette er en dårlig stil, og jeg suger i engelsk… jeg visste ikke hva jeg skulle skrive om, i oppgaven sto det :

Write your own mystery story, make your own title…

Mitt resultat ble det du ser nedenfor x)
Ser man ordfeil, plis skriv til meg, jeg vil bli bedre i engelsk!!!


MY STORY ABOUT HOW I BECAME A BLACK ELF

I don’t know how to start. Maybe I just can tell my name. My name is Sienna, and I’m not a normale person. I’m a elf. The story I shall tell about is how I became a dark/ black elf. Before I start, Elf, vampires, vampans… etc, etc…. are real. I know… all of us are real…

I guess every good story start with << it was a time>> or all good scary-stories start With “a flash” light, thunder, storm… NOT mine. My story start when I was born, but… we let this story start when I read a book abort vampires and their bloodbrothers vampans. A vampan is a sort of vampires. A vampan has violet skin, red hair, bloodred eyes and bloodred lips. They’re very dangerous .
It’s a big difference from vampires. A vampan loves to kill, loves blood, red blood. A vampan kills humanes, and drink all the blood in the human’s body.
A vampire don’t kill the human. They just drink a little drop of blood. When I started reading the book, and read abort vampires, I thought Kurda ( my boyfriend ) look like a vampire. He was high, thin, very dark brown eyes ( sometimes it’s look like they’re black ) black hair, and very red lips and his skin is pale/ White and cold. I thought Kurda was a vampire, so I had to be out of my nut.

At the evening Kurda came home to me.
<< Sienna, I‘m sorry, but it‘s dangarous for you to hang out With me>>
<< what?! >>
<< you know… I ask you again, what if I’m not a kind boy, what if I’m the bad one? >>
<< SILLY you Kurda>>
<< SIENNA, you stupid elf I’m just trying to protekc you!>> Kurda turned around and walked away. “ he has a secret for me” I took my jacket ( it was winter and snow outsider) careful I walked after Kurda.

It was very dark around me. Kurda had went to the wood, and I walked foolhardy after him. I had a bad feeling abort what I was doing and where I walked. I felt like someone, or something kept an eye on me.
At the first moment I was walking after Alexandrian, in the next… I was on the ground. I relly don’t know what had happening, but I looked up in a ugly violet face, red hair and bloodred eyes. The bloodred lips smiled evil. It was an vampan.
<< mmmm… your blood smells good, Arrlack is hungry.>> I tried not to show the vampan how scared I was.
<< oh, Kurda, was a lucky vampire before Arrlack get his little girlfriend, Sienna>>
<< Arrlack, leave Sienna>> someone screamed.
<< Alexandrian and Kurda>> the vampan loughed. All thing I saw was blood when two vampires came to save me.

<< Alexandrian, she’s avlive>> I looked up in Kurda’s dark eyes.
<< you a vampire >>
<< yes, but I’m not evil >> I was looking aroun. Arrlack lay on the ground- hes blood paint the White snow red. Arrlack was dead.
<< ah.. Kurda? >>
<< yes sweetie>>
<< who is Alexandrian? >> I asked
<< Alexandrian, is my vampire teacher>>
<< Kurda, I need to tell you… Arrlack bite Sienna… she can die>> Alexandrian looked at Kurda.
<< we can change her into a black elf, or we can let her die, your choice>>
<< Sorry Sienna, but, I will let vampireblood changer who you are>>

I looked suprised in the mirror. The little blueeyed, blond kind elf, had now became a black/ dark elf. The vampireblood had changed me. My eyes was violet, and my hair was black. And now, becouse of my vampireblood I need to drink blood. Not much, but I have to…

I don’t know what to say. I rally hope you believe in vampires, elf, vampans… etc… you never know when your life turn around, when you have to start drinking blood… you have to be careful. Maybe your bestfriend, or boyfriend is a vampire…

Mysterygirl   Nordland

 

    Eza93
Jeg tror ikke jeg skal begynne å rette, er fryktelig dårlig i engelsk xP (Selv om jeg fikk 5+ på en innlevering for rundt 1 uke siden :O) Men jeg likte teksten veldig godt, den var veldig spennende i grunnen :D Stemmer ;)

Og uansett har furunål rettet litt ^^,

Klem fra Eirin :) <3

09/02/2009 15:30

 
    bettia
denne historien likte jeg! var gode skildringer, og jeg fikk vite mye om hva en vampan er, noe jeg ikke visste;-) jeg tror ikke jeg skal begynne å rette på noe, liker ikke å rette andres engelsk da jeg vet at jeg selv har en del feil som går opp igjen...;-)

klem<3

11/02/2009 22:16

 
    Friday
Ååå, så flott historie! :-D <3
Det er noen feil her og der, men ellers er det supert! =D
Ser at Furunål har rettet litt ^^

En liten ting:
Det er "an" foran ord som starter med en vokal, og "a" foran ord som starter på konsonant ^^
Eks:
An elf
A parrot

Kanskje du visste det, men hvis ikke, så vet du det nå =)

Dette var en flott historie, jeg stemmer! =D

Klem Frida ^^ <3

15/02/2009 22:59

 
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